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Hermione YB - WIP by BrandonSMitchell Hermione YB - WIP by BrandonSMitchell
A sketch done late in the night about 3 hours work.. will do more with it later after some sleep.
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Anarikins Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013
Shite man, you're drawing has changed so much :D
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BrandonSMitchell Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013
thanks anari :)
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Anarikins Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013
No problemo
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BrandonSMitchell Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013
How you been?
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Anarikins Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013
Starting college is fun, learning that i need to kick-start good study habits hurts a bit but oh well. Been good ... How is life treating the Zesh?
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BrandonSMitchell Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013
Well the past year was pretty bad... this year is looking pretty good. looking forward to getting a cintiq and paying of loans soon. We need to paintchat or something soon :)
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Anarikins Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013
Ohh, I hope there is some way to make it better? I envy you and your Cintiq though I can't complain, I adore my tablet :) We must pchat, I am always looking to draw now to blow off tension when I'm doing an assignment.
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BrandonSMitchell Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013
you still on niko's? or where do you usually go now?
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kitsuK8 Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2010
very cute!!! I love the detail to her face
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gemlord-art Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2010
I am afraid that because I lack a premium membership (and absolutely refuse to give money to the powers that be), my critique will have to be in comment form. Of course, if you feel I have been unfair or simply don't want the critique viewed, you will of course have the ability to hide this.

First of all, I really like this. This is one of the reasons why I enjoy OCing with you, I can always learn from how you draw, whether it's a quickly sketch face or a carefully drawn full-figure. Just looking at this and trying to figure out how you did the perspectives has already, in the last few minutes, taught me about arm placement.

Now, let's start tearing this down, shall we? The first thing I noticed that seemed strange to me was her eyes. I know you like to draw eyes large, with a manga/anime bias, but in this image, their size just feels wrong. I think they could really use being trimmed down a bit, but that's really more of an opinion than anything about your technique. The eyes themselves look good, I just dislike the comparative size with her head.

Next, the actual shape of her head. The left side of her face, and all the way around the jaw, looks good. But then, up there on the right side of her face, where her forehead protrudes...well, that's really it, isn't it? Her forehead protrudes. It looks like you originally drew her face as though she would be looking straight at the camera, with her face lined up directly to the front, but when you came around to drawing her facial features, you changed your mind and shifted her face so that she faced to her right a bit. Not really a problem, except that was was most likely once the side of her head has become a tumor-like lump on her forehead. Granted, the big eyes really don't help the matter, giving her head a sort of 'greys' appearance (you know, those little aliens with the big eyes?), but still, most foreheads at the most go straight up, not bow outwards.

Her neck seems fine, but...see that thick line detail, just underneath the right side of her chin? I know that's supposed to be a tendon, but really think you should consider either thinning it a LOT or scrapping it completely...because when I saw it, my first thought was "Wait, Hermione has an Adam's apple?" You might also consider adding a little detail line or two at the space between her collarbones. It's not necessary, but I personally like just a teensy bit of extra distinction there.

The dress...I like a lot. I love the over-the-shoulder thing, looks great...but, um, I hope you're going to match the colour of the dress and the purse a little closer, 'cause the black on white right there...is hideous. I'm cringing, is what I'm doing.

Now, you've given her a very delicate upper frame, with thin arms and narrow shoulders, a respectable but certainly not large bust, and below that a smooth curve to her waist. Good so far...but then, you balloon out her hips more than I would expect on her. They would be understandable in a more mature individual, such as a young woman who has completed puberty, but in this instance, Hermione is only 14, and while she certainly would have hips, she probably wouldn't have hips that had widened past her shoulders already. As far as them, I'd be willing to say, but not past. If you were the take my suggestion here to heart, I would also suggest perhaps narrowing her waist a teensy bit along with the hips, if only to give the illusion of hips without the connotation of a badonkadonk riding along behind her.

So, I'm looking at her legs, and something isn't quite right. At first, I think you've made her calves too fat, which is slightly true when you compare, again, to the thinner build of her arms and chest. But that's not all. There's something else really bugging me. Is it her feet? Although I'm not a fan of the shoes you've chosen (which look like ballet slippers) they really aren't angled incorrectly, or too big or too small. So what is it? And then I realized...she's got some freaky cankles going on there. This is going to be one of those rare times when I actually know something about anatomy that I learned through my own powers of observation, and not through other, more knowlegeable people telling me. Ankles are thinner when looking at them straight on than they are when looking at them from any other angle. Why is this? Because, when looking at it straight on, the only parts that are visible are the tibia, part of the fibula, and tops of the tarsals. True, the tibia and the fibula bulb outward noticeably at their ends, especially the fibula on the outside, but the lumps are relatively minor and are positioned very close to the narrowest point of the ankle, where the foot and leg actually connect. However, when you look at the ankle from any side angle, you suddenly see what's behind it, namely the Achilles' tendon. This nearly doubles the apparent width of the ankle, meaning that the ankle would appear, when drawn, to be significantly thicker from any side angle than it would straight on. However, in your drawing here, her left ankle is noticeably thicker than her right one, despite the fact that we're looking straight on at her left ankle. Basically, you need to switch the thicknesses of each ankle, make the right one thicker and the left one thinner.

And that, my friend, is my critique. I hope that I have been of service to you.
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BrandonSMitchell Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2010
Nope this is absolutely why I requested critiques, and I'm glad that my drawing can you you learn even though I'm still learning myself. And I always request critiques because I'm not looking for but kissing , how am I supposed to know whats wrong if no one will tell me?

Anyways, I agree with all your suggestions. As I read them off I could see what you meant by each one. So thanks Gem. It's exactly the kind of thing I was looking for.
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gemlord-art Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2010
Well, then I'm glad I could be of assistance. Anytime, tiger.
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BrandonSMitchell Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2010
you up for an oC later?
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gemlord-art Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2010
Wish I'd seen this, I was sketching just about all day long. Maybe another day.
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